点评：这期有三个句子都涉及到了汶川地震。这个句子唯一的问题是第一个“of”的用法，建议改为“from/out of”.

6. Very little of the city remained after the earthquake nine years ago.

点评：虽然句子没错，但调整句序后，它表达的重点会更突出。试感受：

After the earthquake nine years ago very little of Wenchuan remained.

7. Today marks the 9th anniversary of the deadly earthquake and many families seem to have moved on, but the grief over their children's death may still remain.

点评：句子写得不错，但是拆分成两个句子效果可能更好，有时候可以少用“and”，该停则停。试体会：

1) Today marks the 9th anniversary of the deadly earthquake. Though many familes seem to have moved on, the grief over their children's death may still remain.

2) Today marks the 9th anniversary of the deadly earthquake. Many familes seem to hold up, but the grief over their children's death may still remain.

8. Her appearance hardly varies with time, and she also remains active in the fashion industry.

点评：作者有意识在一个句子里使用两个刚刚学过的词，很赞。一个月后作者可以试着在一篇文章里尽可能多地使用30个精选词：）需要注意的是，这句话中“remain”的意思是 continue to possess a particular quality or fulfil a particular role，和单词图中的意思有区别。

9. Although victims surviving the brutal and chaotic Cultural Revolution have received compensation from the government, trauma remains.

点评：很棒的句子。试体会第二个分句中流露出来的情感。别忘了 的忠告，“Short is better than long.”

10. "Although on Tuesday Smartisan technology launched its attracting new product Nut Pro, which is of delicate ID design at an affordable price, unclear promise remains due to strong competition in China smartphone market." Industry expert Evan Wu told Pingwest.

点评：这个句子是作者翻译的某行业专家评论锤子发布会的原话？有些小错误，而且我认为这里用“but”表示转折会更到位，修改如下：

"OnTuesday Smartisan Technology launched its attractivenew product Nut Pro, which is at an affordable price, butunclearprospectsremain due to the strong competition in China's smartphone market," industry expert Evan Wu told Pingwest.

今天是母亲节。希望大家的节日问候她们都收到了。

题图：下雨乐队。

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